Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
Stephanie was on her bed, staring at a poster. It represented a snake rolled around a branch. One of her biggest dream was to have her very own snake. Finally, she had her first pay for her work at her father's office. With that money, she could buy her serpent. She wanted a cobra. Since this was the first animal she bought of her whole life, she didn't really know how to do it. Sadly, she couldn't ask her parents because they hated snakes since her grandfather died of a snake bite. The rule was if she wanted one, she would have to buy it herself and take care of him herself, including buying the food and all the needed products. But she was determined. She would have her snake. The next day, she was at the pet shop." So many types of snakes!" She thought to herself. Indeed there were a lot of types. Although, one of them looked really cute. It was him that would become her snake. She called a guy to ask him to get it out for her, but the guy freaked out when she pointed it.
-Do you have experience in having snakes at home? He asked first
- Not really… actually, this is my first, She answered sadly
-Then don't take this one
-It's a very rare type of snake we found lately. He isn't aggressive at all but he attacks at random moments and you can easily die of his bite.
-Well ill keep it in an aquarium with a cover so he can't get out
-It's not that easy. He is a very intelligent snake and is able of doing a lot of things, including opening a cover.
She sighed. He really looked good. She looked for hours with the guy but only that snake was looking cute. And just to make things worse, every time she passed, he looked at her with imploring eyes. She decided to go back home and come back the next day with a choice. She went to sleep and she had all sorts of dreams in which the snake Bit her by surprise but every time, it ended up well and she became friend with it. When she got up on the evening, her choice was made. She went to the pet shop and the guy welcomed her again.
-So, what's your choice? He asked.
-I'll take the rare snake, she said with confidence.
-Are you really sure?
-Yes I am
He didn't say anything more and went to take him. He gave it to her with a giant pack of food and a booklet on how to live with a dangerous snake. Also, he gave her a paper on which was written his name, specie and age. She went home with all of it. Arrived at home, she got out her old aquarium she had when she was in 3rd grade and placed him in. She already adapted it for him so that he could survive easily. She passed the rest of the day to read the booklet. In the evening, she put a rat in the aquarium and went to sleep. In the morning, She dressed herself, went to eat and brushed her teethes. Weirdly, her tongue hurted a little. She didn't care. She went to work with her dad again and came back by noon. She went straight upstairs to find her snake when she had the worst fear of her life. The aquarium was empty. She went around looking in her bedroom to find it in the food bag. Relieved, she put it back in the aquarium with two rats and played on her computer. The more the time advanced, the more her tongue hurted. At a time, it hurted so much that she felt like it would divide in her mouth. Why did this have to happen when she had her new snake… The next day, she went to the dentist and asked him to look. The Answer of the dentist freaked her out. He said that the tip of her tongue divided in two for a mysterious reason. Also, he noticed that two weird hole appeared on her cheek. It looked like a bite. She realized it might be her snake but when? And why would it do that? She went straight home and was happy to know that her parents slept. She went upstairs and called the guy of the pet shop.
-Welcome to the pet shop what can I do to help y-
-Oh hello Stephanie! Why do you ask?
-Just to know…
-Well we are actually testing it in lab but answers aren't here yet.
She didn't answer and closed the line. Could it be…? Her doubt soon became reality. At first, it wasn't so bad. She felt weird, like dizzy. Then, her tongue ache came back worse than ever. This time, it felt like her tongue became flat. Two holes in her palate, and her sense of smell changed. By reflex, her tongue went out with a "SSS" and went back in her two little holes. It smelled something. Her fear was so great she couldn't even yell. She was becoming a snake. Her nose stayed there as a decoration and her canine started to grow longer and sharper. The nails on both her hand got longer and sharper, like claws. The easiest part was done. The next went a little worse. Her chest started to grow bigger and scales started to appear on her waist. When the scales finally made their way to her toes, she felt a strong sensation in her legs. They seemed to grow liquid. Then, her leg "juice" fused with one another and became solid. Her legs were now a 6 foot long green snake tail, just like her snake. When she realized that, she turned to see it. It was out of his aquarium and was staring at her. Weirdly, she understood him like if they had a normal conversation.
-So… do you like your new form?
She was about to answer when a pain pierced though her back and neck. A thin membrane peeked out and relied the back of her head to the middle of her back, like a cobra.
-Right, he said calmly. I forgot this part.
-How could you…
-Well, I need to reproduce you know
Stephanie looked at her new body. She was still partly a human. All her clothes were on the floor.  She had a human torso and head but a snake mouth and tail.
-You are a naga my dear.
- But my parents…
- You'll have to live with it.
She started to cry. How could she abandon her family?  It was out of the question for her to show herself like that to them.  
Someone knocked on the door. She recognized her father's strength. She must have done too much noise in her transformation and awoke him. He probably wanted to scold her for that
-Wait dad! I'm changing clothes.
-Since when does changing clothes does so much noise? Said a heavy voice behind the door. And what's that voice you have?
She plugged her mouth. Did she sound so different? She had to get away. She quickly took a pen and wrote a message for him and her mother. She took her snake and some of her things while her father tried to ask her again. She put it all in her bag and went out by the window. She landed softly in the bushes. She was really lucky that a forest lied behind her house. She slid to there, sat on a rock and cried. She cried all the tears she could cry without her body suffering from it. Then, She went deeper into it with her snake in hope she could find a good place to make a house.

As for her father, he finally entered and realized she went out with her snake. He took the message and read it out loud.
Dear father. I am terribly sorry but I must go. For some reasons, you would not like me anymore because you wouldn't think I am myself. My body had some kind of… modifications. Please, inform this to the guy at the pet shop, to mom and to everyone. I'll love you all forever. Stephanie. P.S. don't look for me for your own good.
He sis all what she asked except for one thing. He called the police and asked them to investigate. Luckily, they didn't find anything.

Since then, a rumor is that in the forest behind her house, people see a half human half snake lady crying.
This is my second deviation!! Once again, I invite you to comment me and my errors.

It talks about a girl whe buy a snake but that has some kind of surprise with it.

I was inspired by the storys of KuroKarasu ( [link] )
and of Chicken-Wannabe ( [link] Very good work of you two! )
Add a Comment:
SciCraftArt Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2016
note to self: new reason to keep 50 locks in box at home
(the other reasons are zombies, aliens and stuff like that)
EskeWolf406 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
Wow this is amazing!! I would love to read more to know what happen to her like how she able to adapt to her new form?
coco066 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2015
Well i don't write much anymore ( or more like at all) because of University and all the things but i do have another text that mentions her if you really are interested.…
Oh and by the way thanks a lot ^^ i did my best and i love knowing some people enjoy it 
EskeWolf406 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
That is alright. We all get busy. ^^/

And you are very much of my welcomed. :D
VX9 Featured By Owner May 1, 2015
This is beautifully writtin, bravo. I love how deep you get into it. This is easily one of the finest things I ever read.
coco066 Featured By Owner May 15, 2015
Thanks ^^ Pleases me to know you enjoyed it. 
thescpcontainment Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2015
oops another SCP got out it escape when SCP-682's Escape Attempt at Site (Classified).  
SpartanNick037 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015
Command, asking permission to send in MTF team.
thescpcontainment Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015
SpartanNick037 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2015
And I was starting to feel bored.
Nine - Tailed - Fox, we have greenlight. I repeat, we have greenlight!
TenmaRKO Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student Filmographer
NOOOO!!!!!!! :nuu: WHY!!!!! WHYYY!!! WHY!!!!!!? :cries:
TanukiTagawa Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
 What hell the poor Stephanie did to have her life blighted this way? :facepalm:
coco066 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
Nothing. I guess not every stories can end well... I wonder if that has anything to do wih the fact that someone i know has the same name XD
TanukiTagawa Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
 Maybe. :hmm:
FOXMCCLOUD643D Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
That sucks 4 her
Raf92 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
nice story :)
shadowdata03 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Student Artist
Data was sleeping on a tree on the forest behind stephanie's house,while his spiky vine tentacles were in the ground,looking to feed on ther hatred of someone.
TheLastHetaira Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, thanks! :love: I'm glad I was able to inspire someone!

A few pointers:

~Quotes should be in quotation marks. You've fixed this in later stories; très bien!

~I'd recommend looking at pics of viper fangs or a good look in any snake's mouth before trying this again. Viper fangs are very different from mammalian teeth, being effectively natural syringes.

~I'll point out now that several species of snake do have vestigial legs. Leg fusions have thus become a gadfly to me. Snakes are not all tail; use centaur logic with nagas.

~Show, don't tell. For example, I'm going to use the species Tropidolaemus wagleri (Wagler's viper/temple viper) to describe what that green snake might have looked like:

"The snake that caught her eye, however, was far more striking than any cobra she had ever seen. Coiled around a branch was a stout serpent with a head like a rounded triangle. Its scales were tiny, green and black leaves overlapping each other in a twisted mosaic. As if noticing that it had a spectator, it yawned, showing inch-long fangs that folded back into its mouth. It then went back to being completely motionless on its branch; at that point, it may as well have been a carefully-crafted sculpture."

I know you hinted that the snake in question might be an elapid later, but see how much more you could have done? A lot of snakes are green, both venomous and not. Paint with words.

Another perk of having a real species in mind: You get to have a lot of fun with its history. Still going with the temple viper, the snake has amazing sexual dimorphism, with females being a lot bigger and more colorful than males. The temple viper gets its name from being found, en masse, near the Temple of the Azure Cloud in Malaysia, where the snakes are considered good luck. Sounds like something out of a fairy tale, doesn't it?

...*Looks at the post date.* I'm two years too late, it seems. ^^; Quel dommage. Still, I hope that this can be of use to you! Seeing my name as a source of inspiration made me feel warm and fuzzy inside.

P.S.- Je me sens mal pour n'ai pas écrit en français. Je peux utiliser la pratique.
coco066 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
Hey thanks! I really appreciate the comments. Ill try to "paint" like you said, but ill admit i wanted to create an actual specie and i don't really have an "image imagination".

For the leg fusion, well i kinda felt like it being my way of doing it. Furthermore, i don'T really understand what you mean by centaur logic. Even so, I guess I could try later on some other kind of "snake tail" tf.

Oh and don't feel bad for not talking in french ;) im billingual and indeed, your french needs a bit of practice because you translated word to word. It would actually be more like: Je me sens mal de ne pas t'avoir écrit en francais. j'aurais besoin de pratique.

Thanks again for taking the time to tell me all of this! Ill try to put your recommendation to good use on later texts.
Merci d'avoir pris le temps de me dire tout cela! je vais tenter de mettre tes commentaires a bonne escient dans mes textes futurs
TheLastHetaira Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'd recommend grabbing a book of reptiles and looking in there, then. :nod: You will probably be amazed by how beautiful and varied snakes can be. (If you really want to go to extremes, just look at what captive breeders do with the colors and patterns of snakes. Purple and orange serpents are real.)

I thought you might get lost around that idea; it warrants some elaboration. Snakes are actually more body than tail. There are ribs and organs in there. In a naga, I would imagine that the same organs would be stretched or, in some cases (such as, for example, the whole area around the pelvis) doubled. Snakes are like Chinese dragons without the legs. Thus, "centaur logic" - there's a whole second body below the human section of a modern naga. Not that most people acknowledge it.

That's what I get for trying to 'check' things using an online translator. :x Never doing it again! Jamais, jamais!

De rien. ;)
yowy Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Seemed to end abruptly. But very good in all.
coco066 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012
I understand why you say so but the abrupt end was intentional. I don't know how i could explain it though. I felt like it was appropriate. But ill consider it for my next texts!
Zeyata Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're a great writer, you know that?
coco066 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012
Thx! it may not seem like it, but a small compliment like that is much important to me and any other artist. To say the truth, I don't write anymore these days and to know that people like my art encourages me to continue! So thanks a lot for all your support!
DHBW Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
this is sad...but I like it....
dijin777 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
nice touching story. I like
coco066 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
Thanks ^^
dijin777 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
u r welcome
6pathsofpain Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
nice. nice.
coco066 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010
Thx :)
Sebaku75 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2010
Wow it´s a great story.
coco066 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2010
Thx! I really appreciate it :nod: BTW if you wanna read my 3 other stories try to find the link between them :aww:
TFTails Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
I like this story a lot
good job
coco066 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2010
Thx :bounce:
Aegis27 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010
The chicken wannabe link doesn't work
Oh, btw great story :thumbsup:
coco066 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010
Oh crap... well the name of his story is NuSkin--Snake TF
i don't knoe how come it doesn't work...
Aegis27 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010
k, ive found it. Dont be to hard on yourself, i fail at programing almost daily ^^;
pieman300 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010
very intreasting stoery and prity good for only your second one,
hmm i wonder if the father woul except here for what she has become.
whin you said she had a head of a human and the mouth of a snake did you mean that her tong and maybe teeth was like a snakes?
coco066 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010
Well she has a snake tongue and long canines but thats pretty much all there is different about her mouth actually :P
Thanks for your comment :D im doing my best.
Add a Comment:

:iconcoco066: More from coco066

Featured in Collections

Naga Stories by SassyDragon18

Devious Collection by kinakuku

Sort stories by pervertedhacker

More from DeviantArt


Submitted on
June 11, 2010
File Size
7.7 KB


30,748 (9 today)
134 (who?)


Creative Commons License
Some rights reserved. This work is licensed under a
Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-No Derivative Works 3.0 License.